Posts based on the decay of Cs-137 (random)

[elpollodiablo]

So the gf's sister finally came out (well, she's out on her myspace

Taking the 'progress' out of 'progressive'

Just kidding. Luck to her!

Anyway. Evaluate this excerpted poem without context. No Googling. Just tell me what you think of it, first impressions. I will tell you that I didn't write it, nor did anyone I know.

"Papa said don't
so I don't tell
I keep it all
dug deep in my head...
I try to scream
I scream inside
it hurts too much
to silent cry--
my throat is choked
I hurt it so
from silent moans
deep down my throat."

[Greg Nog]

Is it T.S. Eliot?

[dieblucasdie]

nah, there's no Dante references

[elpollodiablo]

Goddammit you guys

[martin_van_buren]

It's Winger, isn't it?

[dieblucasdie]

Goddammit you guys

Fine, I'd say it's probably either like, late-60s, early-70s "teh feminists are here, jerks! Listen to us!"

Or else it's more contemporary and written by someone for whom English is not a first language to draw attention to the plight of women in the Third World.

Or both.

In either case it's pretty effective.  I suspect you're thinking it's simplistic and pat and cheesy or something but I don't agree. 

[diesel_powered]

It's Winger, isn't it?

[Mike24]

did blucas just disagree with an opinion pollo hadn't even expressed yet?

[dieblucasdie]

did blucas just disagree with an opinion pollo hadn't even expressed yet?

Yeah.  Maybe I'm wrong, but asking us to evaluate a poem out-of-context seems like a way of saying, "See!  This is no different from livejournal poetry without the context!"  But maybe that's not the case.

[C of heartbreak]

I was thinking, if you did google it it'd be near impossible to do with a single line, because they're all so cliche.

So it sucks.

Though I am assuming pollo wrote it

[Greg Nog]

I googled it using "dug deep in my head".  One of four results was the poem.  I'm shocked that none of the rest were about earwigs.

[C of heartbreak]

Haha I just got it using that one too actually. (Sorry for cheating )

[Andrew_TSKS]

hah, it reads like papa roach lyrics to me. am i an asshole? let me google it now.

EDIT: haha oh man.

[C of heartbreak]

Well livejournal poetry and be compelling and socially relevant, but that doesn't mean it can't suck.

[elpollodiablo]

Goddammit you guys

Fine, I'd say it's probably either like, late-60s, early-70s "teh feminists are here, jerks! Listen to us!"

Or else it's more contemporary and written by someone for whom English is not a first language to draw attention to the plight of women in the Third World.

Or both.

In either case it's pretty effective.  I suspect you're thinking it's simplistic and pat and cheesy or something but I don't agree. 

It's bad poetry.

[Andrew_TSKS]

what's interesting is that blucas called the origin of the poem.

[elpollodiablo]

It's not exactly hard to place.

The reason I wanted to de-contextualize it was not to point to its comparative lack of subtlety or merit (it does read as bad livejournal poetry, after all), but to see if others' reactions to it would be similar to mine if they encountered it outside of a particularly poorly-written piece of scholarship that kind of plops it down in the middle of an argument like a turd.

[ellaguru]

Ahh, it's safely* above freezing today in the Great White North, for the first day since, I don't know, beginning of December. Another day of this and all the snow will be gone.



*it's spent a couple hours of the last few months at, like, 1 or 2 degrees, but today it's hit 10 degrees, so it actually feels not-cold.

... and then it hailed on me on my bike ride home. April truly is the cruelest month.

- OK, back to your poetry discussion. Don't mind me.