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Come read a short story I just wrote
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For a summer assignment in AP English Language and Composition I had to read Stephen King's
On Writing
. I enjoyed the book despite him being an author I have minimal intrest in. I think he had alot of really good things to say. Anyways as part of reading this book we had to do an exercise out of the book. The exercise explained a pretty norma situation of an abusive husband, whose in jail. The wife sees a report of a jailbreak, and yadda yadda yadda you get the idea. Well his little trick is to reverse the roles of the husband and wife, where she is the abusive escapee. Since there is high collective of writing bitches on this board, I thought you'd like to take a lookey see.
This is my first creative writing in some time.
Looney Tune
Dick takes the left onto Dawson in his small green Chevy Cavalier, only blocks away from home. His tank has been below quarter full for the whole day, but with gas prices as they are, he fears driving even near the pump. ,AeuPiano Man,Aeu begins playing again on the classic rock station and Dick expels ,AeuChrist!,Aeu out of frustration as it was the second time he hard the number in his small jaunt back forth through the streets of Brooklyn. And then reconsiders why he even bothers with radio anymore.
He thinks to himself ,AeuI,Aeom right due for taking a nap but this head ache will be the end of me for sure,Aeu as he rubs circular messaging motions into the top part of his temple. He has a thirst for herbal tea and over the counter medications to ease the tension.
He slows down as he comes near the classic Brownstone to search for temporary a parking space. He has two spots still reserved in near by garage, but he is only going to be inside for a few hours before he has to pick up his daughter, Little Nell, from a friends birthday party.
I say still reserved because he no longer has two cars to occupy both spaces. The second space belonged to his wife, Jane. Since the Brownstone was inherited by Dick from his grandmother, he could afford the parking spaces since the burden of rent was lifted. His grandmother died 7 years ago after living in the house for over 65 years, Dick and Jane just gave birth to little Nell, and the house was given to them as it was probably the safest area in Brooklyn and they certainly could use the space.
It,Aeos not like she,Aeos dead. No, it would much easier for Dick if she was. But I doubt anyone could gage how much work a spouse descending into insanity would be.
They had been together as a couple for seven years, married for 3, before any signs of Jane getting crazy. It first had to do with arguments over dinner, where a new temper of Jane,Aeos had started to grow violent. What began with some slightly unexpected whacks grew into chases around the house with Jane wielding a frying pan. Arguments over nothing, such as his choice of tie or the phone not working were an everyday thing. Near all of them becoming violent. Jane,Aeos prime choice of weapon in those easy days was book to be hurled at Dick,Aeos head. Let it be known that Dick was a history buff, so there was a great assortment of heavy books all over the house.
Dick did not seek help from his wife,Aeos wrath. It wasn,Aeot for any macho reasons as being embarrassed he was being beat up by his wife. He wanted to protect Jane from any embarrassment. He never struck back either, for he could tell there was something wrong with his wife. She was no longer the same kind soul he loved all through college.
Situation gets worse as Jane is convinced Dick is having an affair with the neighbor, despite the neighbor being Harold, a hard of hearing 68 year old WWII veteran who was good friends with Dick,Aeos Grandmother. It is not until Jane starts getting violent with Nell does Dick get help. An incident where Jane had hit Ness in the back of the head with videocassette, claiming because she was dirty (she was not), producing a large lump on Ness,Aeos head and terrible weeping caused Dick to finally call the police.
He explained her situation, and did not want to press charges, but did want her be put somewhere she could get help. It has been 2 years since, and Jane still continues treatment for psychosis at Pajamsis Mental Center in South Brooklyn. In the last year Dick has visited her twice. The first time she did not remember who he was, the second she refused to see him.
Since it was collecting dust, Dick sold Jane,Aeos car but the kept the space for a place to put his go-kart he was building on spare time.
But now he has forgotten about her, for a doozey of a headache has taken over. Up the 7 step stoop and through the heavy door with old fashioned knocker reveals a world of old fashioned upscale Brooklyn. For the most part, his Grandmother,Aeos decorating has stayed intact. Earth tones all around with floral accents around. Dick walked down the thickly glazed hardwood floor into the kitchen and put the water to boil for his herbal tea. He brought out the box from the counter and laid it on the counter for when the water was ready. As he walked up the stairs to the living room he picked up a familiar aroma and thought to himself how Nell must have been looking through her mother,Aeos things again.
He turns on the TV to catch a few clips before the kettle is ready. There is not much new happening with the mayor elections coming close. The kettle,Aeos squeal beckons him back to the kitchen. He pours the water in the cup and as he waits for the tea bag to dissolve he grabs 2 aspirin and 2 sleeping pills. He,Aeos sure this mixture of medications and his favorite tea will put him right out. Pills swallowed. With the cup in his hand he ascends the stairs thinking about his relaxation on the couch until he finishes his tea and then some sleep for a few hours as he doesn,Aeot have to pick up Nell until 8:30. The scent again catches him off guard. Most definitely Jane,Aeos perfume, he remembers buying it on their honeymoon in France.
He sits on the couch, and as he sips away the news begins to blur together as he falls asleep.
,AeuOsama Bin Laden,AeP.opens new roller coaster,AeP.wins against Seattle,AeP,Aeu is all he catches. Almost completely out of consciousness he hears ,AeuBreaking,AeP pajamas metal detector,AeP,Aeu and the he closes his eyes.
,AeuPajamsis Mental Center!,Aeu Dick yells aloud as his mind clears blank.
He puts the pieces together from the remaining moments of the news bulletin that 3 mentally ill patients had escaped from the confines of the hospital, that one guard has was killed, 2 were quickly apprehended, but one women still remains at large. Names and descriptions of the escapees are not given. ,AeuOh please, don,Aeot let it,AeP,Aeu
Jane,Aeos laughter never had chilling characteristic to it. Heck, nothing had scared Dick more in his life then the laughter he heard before he could finish that sentence. Despite being very alien, he knows for certain whom it was.
,AeuI,Aeom famous Richard!,Aeu a voice said from the Nell,Aeos bedroom down the hall.
Only two people in the world ever called Dick by his more formal first name, and one of them was dead.
Dick got up from his chair, and got into the hallway with hopes of making outside before he could even see his wife. She was already in the hallway waiting for him. John first instinct had him turn around and run into door on his right. The bathroom. He slammed it shut, locked it, and then backed away and sat on the toilet. He sat there in horror as he listened to Jane,Aeos fist bellow against the door thinking how she could ever manage to kill him and thinking of how she might have already killed someone else.
,AeuRichard, what are you doing in there?,Aeu asked Jane. The way her voice sounded through the wood, Dick could tell her face was flush against the door. ,AeuRichard, are you washing up to kiss me? I know clean boys get kisses,Aeu
,AeuOh god, oh god,Aeu Dick repeated as if he was breathing it.
,AeuDickey Dickey, not so sticky, he comes out and gets licky licky,Aeu [
jeese what was I thining
-WTSL] Jane says in a slow and calm nature. She then comes out of her childish improve rhyme ,AeuI was just asleep, and then I heard your kettle. Thank goodness we can talk now.,Aeu
Dick can not get a word out. As Jane cries for him to answer her, she begins to violently attack the door with the ferocity of a sieging Trojan soldier. Dick covers his mouth with both hands, still trying to wrap his head around this awful surprise. Eventually she gives tired, and backs away from the door. Dick can hear her footsteps as she meanders the hallway. Back and forth she steps for a good five minutes before she stops. She then begins to walk downstairs humming to her self the birthday song, and quick enough he hears the door shut.
He takes slam of the door as some relief but doesn,Aeot doubt for a minute she could still be in the house. He sits there sort of embarrassed of how frozen he was. He sits there for 45 minutes Dick thinks to himself ,AeuGod help me if Nell was here,Aeu
And then it dawns on him. The Birthday song! He jolts out the bathroom, runs over the invitation lying in the hallway and down the stairs. He burst through the door without thinking to shut it. His wife may have been gone a few years, but she knows Brooklyn like the back of her hand.
He looks left and right trying to scope her out. Nothing! He runs for the car. It,Aeos gone. ,AeuWhat!,Aeu Dick exclaims, but then notices the sign and realizes his car must have been towed. A pretty impressive show of the New York law enforcement system to nab a car that was only sitting there 2 hours.
But he knows what to do. He dashes right, and left around the block. His mind is focused and the security guard Dave is a little insulted when Dick doesn,Aeot return a wave as he dashes past his booth. Sprinting up the ramp he makes it to his wife,Aeos old parking space. The go kart!
He yanks at pull start. The first two yanks were with all his might but to no avail. The third time a small cloud of black smoke blows out and the motor crescendo the sound of success. Dick peels off down the ramp leaving his helmet behind. Without second guessing his height squeals under the self lifting gate at the security booth and fish tails a left down Horton Ave. Being in the city, traffic is blocked, and rather then some Hollywood chase scene drifting between cars, Dick pulls onto the side walk and instead dodges children. Once he,Aeos made it to Janst he pulled back onto the road without any thought of other vehicles. A garbage truck swerves quickly out of his way and careens into a Chinese mini grocer. An officer on horseback is alerted and begins his chase on Dick.
Now that he is on Plesinton St. there is only 4 more blocks before he gets to the party. The gaining officer is galloping only a block behind. He pulls up to the building, and runs for the courtyard. He can hear the crying of children and begins his aerobic cycle of ,Aeuoh god,Aeu again.
He arrives on the scene to see a bunch of children huddled around 3 mothers, all of them crying. With them is Little Nell. He runs for her, gabs her, and everything is glowing as he picks her up. He asks Ness ,AeuWhat,Aeos the matter with everyone? ,Aeu, and the little girl points to a rented moonwalk set up in the corner of the courtyard. Sitting in the darkened corner of the moonwalk is Jane looking not so distraught as she feast herself on a whole sheet of birthday cake. From the look of her, she is enjoying the cake more then anyone could think humanly possible. The icing is swished all over her face and chunks of it are in her knotted hair. The galloping patrol finally arrives on scene, and before he makes his way to apprehend Dick, he and the rest of the mothers explain their situation with the escaped looney in the Bugs Bunny jumping gym.
From there Dick walked home holding Ness in her arms leaving the go kart behind. The galloping police officer was given an award for capturing Jane. Jane was placed in a more secure hospital father away, and Nell,Aeos friend re-scheduled a party for next week.
The End.
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